Sta.sh
Slowly the sun is setting in the distance,
In the sky already the first stars are twinkling.
The river is shimmering like a silver band.
Peace invades the whole land.
Full and round the moon illumines the earth,
So that it will finally become night again.
But in the middle of the wood –
There is a clearing fair –
An elf is sitting under the trees –
Lost in musing –
I was sunk in better times.
Silent, timeless -
One with nature –
Moonlight in the autumnal wood.
Leaves glisten softly,
Music strikes up
Beautiful like starlight.
The whisper of the worlds,
The glances of magic,
And the eternity of elves,
In dreams of dark ages.
In the shimmering moonlit night,
When the wind sleeps in the crowns,
I rise from the ground,
Wandering among the trees.
I feel by myself that never will
A human touch penetrate these grounds!
And the wood stands listening
To its own silence soundless.
And I lift my arms,
Looking up to the stars,
Like a lovely thought
Of moonlit loneliness.
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this was a very interesting poem. It suits its title really well. This work is original, its vision was breathless (almost as if one has actually transcended beyond this world into the imaginarium and is residing among the elves themselves. Its quite real), and the technique seems... to try to capture that elfish scheme of poetry, perhaps?
It's lost some of it's special, secretive feel.
Prettyflour here on behalf of
This poem has such a magical feel to it. Being a fan of fantasy, I very much enjoy that aspect. I can see why you won 3rd place! Congratulations!
I also very much enjoyed the imagery. Lines like:
The river is shimmering like a silver band.
Full and round the moon illumines the earth,
So that it will finally become night again.
In the shimmering moonlit night,
When the wind sleeps in the crowns,
really paint a beautiful picture. I think your vision was well conveyed through your words. I would say that this is quite creative too.
I have to agree with
I do have one comment in regards to these lines:
And the wood stands listening
To its own silence soundless.
I like the alliteration in the second line but I feel that using silence and soundless is a bit redundant.
On the whole, I think is quite lovely and I truly enjoyed reading it. I hope this was helpful!
Thanks and have a great day!
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