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In the hours of your brilliance
Dark soul's child is dying.
You cause new visions -
The sad eye becomes blind.

Moon, mirror of the sun in the darkness!

Kisses are easily shed
In your protective refuge.
Caressed by Venus' whisper
Prohibited barriers yield.

Moon, celestial crown!

Illuminator of the star map,
You show the way to the lost.
Those who seek shelter in the bright light
Cower at the wooden bridge.

Moon, watch-tower of deliverance!

Underneath your canopy
All earth-creatures are sleeping.
In your lap you gently rock
Germinating traces of life.

Moon, bearer of life,
Executor of time,
Galactical guardian!

Moon, patron of love,
White swan of the night,
Banner of light!

Moon, cosmic dust,
Keeper of the star gate,
God of midnight!
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All the different facettes the moon can be looked at and everything attributed to the moon.
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Hello, I am from :iconthecritiquables: with my critique on this piece. This is quite an amazing piece. The title did give me a hint of what it might be and I was not disappointed.

The different aspects of the moon - different perspectives from which it can be taken. Although the perspectives that you have chosen are more on the positive side, I am still happy with the ideas and rather discussing the positive aspects suits it. The meter was surprisingly somewhat maintained which is something new. I really liked it. The feel again was quite magical - there were many expressions which did feel like out of some old mystic work.

There was although a little hindrance in reading for me. I had to reread many portions to be able to understand them like the first stanza second line still leaves me perplexed over its meaning rather the last line of it as well. The "sad eye becomes blind" does not give me much of a meaning. That said, the rest of the work was deep as well and perhaps others may be able to deduce something from these words so all is well.

Over all a fine work which I found slightly difficult to understand at places.
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*Ealdeth Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice job
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*Malintra-Shadowmoon Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
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*Ealdeth May 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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~tickersymbol Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully expressed :)
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*Malintra-Shadowmoon Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
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Mood: Love ~larebabysaiyan Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very beautiful poem.^^XD
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*Malintra-Shadowmoon Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. I am very glad that you like it :)
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~larebabysaiyan Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome ^^:heart::heart::heart:
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This is awesome, keep up the good work! :onfire:
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*Malintra-Shadowmoon Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I am glad that you like it :)
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